Tuesday, July 31, 2012

Darkness Falling: The Forever Twilight Series by Peter Crowther

This book can be found at: http://www.amazon.com/Darkness-Falling-Forever-Twilight-Series/dp/0857661698

Why I bought this book:
Initially, I was attracted to the interesting premise. I am an avid reader of post apocalyptic novels. I was hoping, and expecting a story that would follow the usual norms: aka. Have a plot line (beginning, middle, climax, and then conclusion that would leave me wanting more) I was also hoping for unique characters that stood out and were different from each other.

What I found out about this book:
Essentially, instead of all the things I expected (of a paid for, professionally published work of art), I found the exact opposite.

Let's begin with the plot:
I enjoyed the beginning introduction to the characters. It was fast paced enough that I could really get into it. However, after the ninety millionth character was introduced, I began to question if there was going to be a story at all. Then the author moved into some of the meat of the plot. The characters began to experience things in the story, like being hunted by the ones that returned from the flash. That was interesting. However, just when the author has re-captured my interest, he begins introducing more characters again. By the time the book reaches its end, (and I'm not sure where the climax of the book was supposed to be) I, the reader, have learned the answers to none of the questions that the plot was supposed to answer, and am utterly angry that I wasted both my time and money.

The Characters:
It was frustrating enough that there were more characters introduced than I can really can remember, but it was infuriating that none of them were well rounded, INDIVIDUAL characters by themselves. Half way through the book, I began to see similarities between male leading characters, so much so that I had a hard time telling the difference between them. An example of this is that both of the smallest children in the story pee themselves, and possess the same linguistic styling. The author changes their names from short versions to long, such as Ron to Ronny, without taking into consideration how much this would confuse the reader (especially after so many new characters were being introduced). Lastly, the author makes all, and I do mean ALL, of his female leads weak, helpless mental cases that must be protected at the cost of the male lead's health or welfare. Also, there were all of I think four females in the story, and about twelve males. The females were the least developed characters in the whole novel. If you are a feminist, or a woman reader, this part of the book will annoy the piss out of you.

Language:
In the literary world of publication, I understand that certain word counts are necessary in certain markets. However, when the author LITERALLY copies and pastes the exact same phraseology from the beginning of the book into, not just one, but MANY different areas of the book, it creates an annoying repetitious pattern for the reader. This screams to the reader that either A: The author doesn't know what the heck he's doing, B: The author's agent and publisher told him that the word count wasn't high enough to publish, so he added unnecessary repetitive language to appease them in the hopes that it wouldn't affect his plot line, or C: ALL OF THE ABOVE. On top of all of this; the language through out is profane, and crass. Each of the characters, yes even the children in the story, curse viciously. 

Words to the author, Peter Crowther:
You had a good premise, and most of the time, good grammar. However, when a reader buys or thinks of buying a book, they want a plot that culminates and characters that have real gumption. I did not get any of that from your book. To me, it came off as a really hard to produce first or second draft. I don't understand why you would devalue your writing so much as to copy and paste all the way throughout the book. I also do not understand how your editors (if you had any) and publishers let this book be released to the public with their name attached to it. If you think I'm being harsh, you would be right, I am being harsh... because you had a good story, one that I was so excited about reading in the beginning, and you let me down. I know you can do better. Next time, lose the negative attitude toward women, develop a plot that actually tells the reader something, and I will read it happily.

Until then... Best of luck,
Joy Johnson


 

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