Friday, June 1, 2012

"After Life: Love" by: Patrick Lee

This story can be found at:  https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/15784

This is a wonderful story about a young man coming of age. The dialogue is clear. The characters seem well rounded and realistic. I also enjoyed the idea of the main character's realization that life is better lived with someone that you love.

Respectfully,
Joy Johnson
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"Survive The Dead: Safe Zone" by: George Cook

This story can be found at: https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/165856

On the positive side: I love the action and suspense of this story. It is believable, which is a warm welcome to my eyes. The story has a good premise and presents great promise for a full length book.
On the negative side: There are words in the story that are repeated nearly back to back. One such example of this is, "Slowly." This can take away from the effect that the author intends for his readers.
Words to the author: You have a great story. Please read it aloud to yourself, edit it just a bit more, and then re-submit it. Other than that, you have a great work of art! Keep up the good work.
Respectfully,
Joy Johnson
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I have traveled all over the United States as both an active duty United States Marine and now as a Veteran. It is my supreme hope that my characters find their way into the world and provide others with the same kind of wonder that they have provided me with these past years. I am currently working on my first novella called, "The Death Dealer Diaries: Ashes To Ashes." It will be available in ebook format in October 2012 on my website: https://www.amazon.com/author/joyjohnsonwrit3r